Why "Sweetie's Mansion" by Moon Shooter SUCKS!

This FanFic has been bugging me for the longest of times. And today, I've finally been able to voice my frustration to someone who hasn't read this abomination. Her is what I said to that person, who will remain Anonymous of course.

You don't say. . .well then, I need you to listen to me an no one else. I know that seems like an outrageous claim, but just trust me on this.

DO NOT read "Sweetie's Mansion." It's a Sweetie Belle Torture Porn.

I know what I'm talking about here, because I've played Luigi's Mansion for the Gamecube. Luigi had to go through a haunted mansion in fight ghosts, but the key is that I always felt in control, I felt that I was making progress, I enjoyed fighting all the ghosts, and the goal of saving Mario seemed obtainable. Luigi's Mansion was fun.

However, in "Sweetie's Mansion," the ghosts Sweetie Belle is fighting aren't random spirits who present a fun and clever battle, they're her own ghostified friends who insult her, spit on her, and tear her down during the battles, during which Sweetie Belle is mentally and physically tortured! And even when she wins and catches her ghostified friends, it doesn't seem like it's resolving anything. Also, the author adds in unnecessary plot points; like an aged up, old, decrepit, half dead Twilight; and Sweetie Belle getting possessed by an evil spirit and further tormented that way.

"Sweetie's Mansion" has got to be one of the most uncomfortable, mean spirited, miserable, depressing, soul crushing, hopeless fanfictions I have ever read. I thought it was gonna be a fun spooky adventure like the game it was based on, but after a bunch of chapters which could make a game two times as long as Luigi's Mansion; oh that's another thing, this story never ends. Just never. Sweetie's in limbo. She's never gonna get out of the mansion. There's no salvation for her I'm afraid. While Luigi's Mansion had plot twists and turns that made you more interested in the plot, you just want this painful experience to end already. You're begging for a cheat code that could make the author skip to the final boss chapter.

I couldn't take it anymore, I gave up on that story. Maybe if it ever ends I'll read the last chapter for the happy ending. But trust me, that story is just to mean spirited and depressing to be enjoyable. You'd be better off just playing "Luigi's Mansion." At least that's fun and spooky in a fun way that makes you feel you're going on an adventure, not living Hell.

Oh yeah, and I forgot, this story likes to have these stupidly retarded "Game Over" scenarios that show Sweetie Belle dying over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over, and over!

This story is utter torment. If you're going to have an adventure where the protagonist is put through suffering, then at least have it go quickly. This story is longer than a college text book! Imagine Cupcakes going on for 30 chapters! That's what this horrible story is. Don't read this sadistic pile of cruel garbage. Please. Don't. Just don't. It sucks.